Flapping her wings, she tries to break free; refusing to budge, her feet stay grounded.
“Panic sets in”
Will I ever?
But, what about when everyone…?
Am I meant to stay put right here?
“Gulp”
Swallowing fear, she stares out the window
Oh, well! Atleast am safe
Inside this cage, with my Tweety grain bowl…
This is my 1st attempt in writing 55 word stories.... do let me know what you think... :)
5 comments:
hmmm...not bad at all!
I just wish you didn't sound so cheerful with the last line...would have had more impact...
it is a good attempt.. !!!
u gave a new angle to the bird being in a cage :)
we tend to look at -ve... but smetimes... +ve side is nice too!
@ Vishesh n Veens-
Thanks~~
@Chandni-
:) A friend once told me i can never write pathos kinda stuff.. maybe its just the chirpy streak in me... :D
aha! It is quite difficult when you have to convey a wealth of meaning in just a few words..
You did it! I think that says a lot
Hello. Iam also from chennai. Your blog is good. your writings too! Praise the Lord.
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