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Am a contradiction of sorts. i love going out and having a good time with friends, and i can also stay home chill out over a book or a movie.. Am very passionate about writing, so give me a topic and watch me float away into wonderland... I Am crazy about music,books,friends and my doggie... :)

May 8, 2008

[55er] Her

Flapping her wings, she tries to break free; refusing to budge, her feet stay grounded.

“Panic sets in”

Will I ever?

But, what about when everyone…?

Am I meant to stay put right here?


Swallowing fear, she stares out the window

Oh, well! Atleast am safe

Inside this cage, with my Tweety grain bowl… wink

This is my 1st attempt in writing 55 word stories.... do let me know what you think... :)


vishesh said...

nice :)

chandni said...

hmmm...not bad at all!

I just wish you didn't sound so cheerful with the last line...would have had more impact...

Anonymous said...

it is a good attempt.. !!!

u gave a new angle to the bird being in a cage :)

we tend to look at -ve... but smetimes... +ve side is nice too!

Aaarti said...

@ Vishesh n Veens-

:) A friend once told me i can never write pathos kinda stuff.. maybe its just the chirpy streak in me... :D

Beauty and the BEast said...

aha! It is quite difficult when you have to convey a wealth of meaning in just a few words..
You did it! I think that says a lot

luthfi said...

Hello. Iam also from chennai. Your blog is good. your writings too! Praise the Lord.